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Hello, I got here by that old adage, `see what they liked`. And I must also add my name to those so captivated At first, I'm seeing wha...

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First, I love fanfics, IF it is of a pairing(s) that I like, or at least Can see happening with How the author applies proper thought, ...


Yes, a Critique, and also, hello from :iconprojectcomment: , as this has been sitting in my queue for some time, so lets get to it... Starting from the he...


Where to start?? So, this picture is `h` tall and `w`wide. From the very bottom there is a 'dark moulding' maybe 3 or 4"'s high, then t...

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Hello, I got here by that old adage, `see what they liked`. And I must also add my name to those so captivated
At first, I'm seeing what I feel are the influences of Renoir, but only just a bit. You've certainly have a technique all your own. Indigo, to greens and yellows at the foliage, to the brightness of the stucco. How some windows are unlit from within to how others are... showing how these homes not only have life, but some soul. How your moss and Ivy show them to be old, Noble souls, indeed. I'm thinking some time in August, perhaps.
I've browsed over Narbonne and Adge, Istres, Avignon, and Montpellier, and others.
By 'Google' maps, none have the feel that they should. Ah, but as the 19th gave way to the 20th century? A simpler, resplendent, life.
Thank you for this!
First, I love fanfics, IF it is of a pairing(s) that I like, or at least Can see happening
with How the author applies proper thought, between the characters presented in canon, and they can show some real development in that pairing. `Korrasmi` is one such I do get behind!
They came out drunk, they walked themselves into the bad guys clutches, they escape... into deeper trouble. Very original, not.
So, this has 3 main parts, as they waking bound up to them escaping that lair and taking shelter in a cave is basically the middle part.
There were typos throughout, pacing needed to be better, you've muzzled the `heroes` so they (and by extension, your readers) can not develop their connections to each other, or the antagonist. Being 'just' a normal human, yet possessing a keen, structured mind, it is perhaps Asami who could have offered different questions to Drider, and either they be the right course of thought, or it presents Korra an `aha` moment that takes them to a winning strategy. Oh, that's right, you already Gagged them.
The Avatar Is mortal. They're basically nude enough, so, no means or tools or Other manipulations to free themselves.
Edit the Hell out of this.. Look at the end of the 2nd to last sentence: " and began to coat them more in silk" ???
try ", and began to coat them in MORE silk."
Yes, a Critique, and also, hello from :iconprojectcomment: , as this has been sitting in my queue for some time, so lets get to it...
Starting from the head, and trying to work backwards, then reversing and moving forward from the tail, we can see his body is swimming through the clouds counter-clockwise, yet, the spines are as if he is going clockwise, based on the two coils we see, but...
The nearer coil just `ends` behind his head, and this cannot be supported by the evidence presented. His jaw is open, and just to the right one can see how the underside curve of that coil is starting to bend down? Where's the rest of it??
The clouds themselves makes for a fine seascape, and the "Jacob's Ladders" are quite fetching shooting out from the sun. The far sky above the tail and rear coil needs to be reconsidered for its coloring, and effects. Is your sun 'rising', or 'setting'? Believe me, it Does make a difference for the rest of the sky.
His head, and the overall color scheme of turquoise and aquamarine blends of greens and blues is solid.
And now, I also need to add about the general angle of view, as it, too, is simply acceptable... except for that missing arc of coil, and, perhaps, a middle coil (not even fully elevated, even) that could be just off his nose and teeth.
Very nice concept, but could be executed better. Thank you.
Where to start?? So, this picture is `h` tall and `w`wide. From the very bottom there is a 'dark moulding' maybe 3 or 4"'s high, then the white baseboard perhaps 15"'s, then more white painted wood capped by more moulding (where her hands are), and where she reposes all the way up, to out of shot, its what? not quite Peach or Finch. All that height, and she center-line in the image. Spot-on!
The curtains diffuse the ambient light, and, along with the 'artwork' behind her shoulder, frames her in the shot with How she is presented. Oh, GODS, looking at how she is presented....
The leg just so, her arms tucked out of shot (yes, of course we see her right, you're shooting an off-set). I really wonder what her hair is like out from under that mask. She looks like a redhead from the bit at her left shoulder. I too, wonder about the contrast of Those shoes, but it does fit, so there...
Of course, I wonder what the same shot/pose would be like with her barefoot?
Same thing, but not quite, for that mask. Merely consider a different style, such as a minimal leather eye mask, to showcase her hair, and yes, her ear, maybe. Just a thought, as yours was more than just fine, indeed. Along with ALL that lovely warm skin. In what, a frame barely Five feet tall??
Overall, she is a most healthy looking lady!!!
So, yes, I like this Very Much! Thank you.. and your little girl, too.
It has mystery and allure, an innocence I want to Be the one to Consume HER!
Gods, now I gotta `rate` this thing, too?
Hello, from :iconprojectcomment: , and just who can I claim to be that has Any authority to say `nee` (or anything like a Knight who says Ni ??).
Your subject is simple and elegant, sublime in the details, everything from the veins over the top of her left foot (or the lack of even toenail polish), the bit of tattoo beneath the left breast, and wondering what it'd feel like to run my fingers through her hair, seeing it splayed about her head over a Red sand beach. Her eyelashes, seeming thick and sultry.. to go along with those lips wound around a coy smile. Oh, such an expanse of skin...
She is indeed a bit of Forbidden fruit, right down to the peaches she is sitting on.

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3wyl Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
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MinionofSolitude Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2017
I've posted to like six or so images since accepting the invitation presented to me to join this group, and I'm curious as to How to insert the `Green Block saying "PROJECT COMMENT"`?
I've seen other peoples posts have it, like Black-Chimaera did on Sep 11 for //peace-in-violence.deviantart.com/art/A-proper-greeting-703311370
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3wyl Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Type : iconprojectcomment : (remove the spaces in between the colons) to show up :iconprojectcomment:

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Red-Eileen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2017
Hey there  :) (Smile)

Wanna join the best place on DA for Girlslove ? Hi!

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